Hey guys. I usually don’t tag peeps because my blog is more of a personal diary. But I decided to do so today because the post is more literary than personal. Inspiration came from reading @ekwem’s post on mosadiel. I wrote this in 20mins on my lunch break and I’m new to stories so comment kindly. I’ll reply your comments after work. Enjoy.
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Relief. Distortion.
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I could make out a sea of burgundy mist tainted with what would seem to be miniature black holes. The holes ran across the circumfrence of the tunnel. A void. I was suspended in it. Unending.
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Sweet relief. Blinding pain.
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The holes would suddenly split my essence into what would have to be at least a million dimensions simultaneously… and then slowly, painfully, regurgitate me and reconstruct my form…
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I was a cocktail of random sensations… not so random, for they alternated between the territories of the pleasurable and the excruciating…
I tried to gather myself… this soul-essence state was one that would take some getting used to…
In this form I trully understood limitation.
I knew how everything worked, I was learning how everything felt.
My environment was observed, I can’t say how, but one thing was certain. My field of vision was trans-dimensional. I still had eyes or so I thought, but they saw beyond their axis… glimpses of the world I just left, it must have been seconds ago. Those nails, the vinegar, the scorn. They came in flashes, and an ethreal excruciation accompanied them. I would rather let my conciousness roam these realms. I knew what I had to do here, and I knew how much time I had.
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I heard voices. Distant as they were, you could hear their pain, their regret. My soulish heart bled for them, and I was here to save them, but I could not tell them. No one could know. Everything had to go according to plan.
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The voices grew louder…
Then from deep within the abyss, I saw him, Abbadon. He smiled at me,as if to be nice to me before the coming onslaught.
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Fumes of sulphur and brimstone sifted through my soulish hair as I was dragged in chains to my torture chambers. Abbadon never welcomes anyone personnally but Beelzebub had made sure I was to be dragged into Tartarus by his most senior subordinate. I glimpsed across the great divide and I saw Abraham. He and thousands of other saints stood at the brink of their beautiful paradise, the Elysian fields. Their faces said it all. The Horror. The fear. If the Amasiah had been killed there was obviously no hope. Everyone except Abraham thought this. For he was Elyons friend. And Elyon never Hides anything from him. He probably knew why I was here. He, and only he, smiled faintly as I was dragged out of their view. And I thought to myself, “surely, Elyon has told him”.
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There was to be no exception for me. I was to go through the routine like everyone else. That was Beelzebubs way of making me less than divinity. For changing the protocol for me would be akin to his admiting that I was not ordinary. And he would never do that. Pride. I guess falling like lightning hasn’t taught him anything after all these millenia.The torture was to last three human days, and then I would be taken into the throne room, to aknowledge Beelzebub as lord of these realms. Everyone bows to him there. But he would take significant interest in my case. Because I had refused to do so previously. All earths glory is but dung compared to the outskirts of my celestial kingdom, Zion. But here I would not have a choice. All who come here must bow to him. Or so he thought. And right there and then… I would make my move…
I AM the Eternal Rhema.
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keLvin said:
Hnnn..the way y’all make out all these biblical truths into stories. Brilliant.
“Everyone except Abraham thought this, for he was Elyon’s friend. And Elyon never hides anything from him..” Indeed he is/was God’s friend
I love that.
Great Job Nugwa.
Nugwa said:
Thanks bro…
BragginRightz said:
I need more than ‘My Books of Bible Stories’ for this post..
Unique write-up.
Ekwe said:
so i inspired this huh? i am…humbled,to say the least.
i thought Abbadon was the Angel with the keys of the bottomless pit, not a surbordinate. let’s make a point of keeping the characters in their original positions.
this is cool. we are talking Jesus here. i am impressed with this.
Nugwa said:
Yep! We talking Jesus. Yeah the abbadon thing was misplaced. I didn’t wanna go with prince of persia or legion cuz they’ve been overflogged. My mistake tho’. I’ll get more proper with the characters…
Ekwe said:
did you get Elyon from ted Dekker?
Nugwa said:
No I didn’t. Elyon is one of God’s Hebrew names. I got that from the Bible.
weird_oo said:
Ekwem directed me here and I’m glad he did! Good work!
Nugwa said:
Glad you liked it…
iamsamsie said:
Nice!
Ekwe said:
i just realized you wrote this before i had a chance to. lol. issokay.
Nugwa said:
You already have dibs on writing on the apocalypse nau… let some of us try other narrations… abi you wan write the whole bible? Lol.
highlandblue said:
See this boy. Well done O. 😀
Nugwa said:
Thanks. 🙂
Joanne said:
Oh wow! This…this is really nice! #deep
Well done Nugwa
ibetapassmynebo said:
Loool let me not lie…I got lost for a second…..
Cool..quite confusing.. I’m sorry I just hate any fn ancient.. New teatament u kno…lool
But twas really nice….not sumfn I wud read but really enjoyed it
Ekwe said:
excruciation is not a word.
cecenostockings said:
Hian Ekwe!!! Relax nau!!
@nugwa, I really enjoyed this. I love bible story renditions. It makes it all so much more interesting, plus I like to read/hear other people’s interpretations of the words.
I’m to scared to try my hands on any as of now.
Nice work (y)
Claspie said:
Nice work, man… This is a story well told in another way. Good job
SlevinCalevra said:
Jesus is Lord!
Halelujah!!! This is my first time here and I think you should right more of this kinda stuff. Someone to remind me that there’s more to life. Too many writers (myself included) talk ish on blogsville these days.
We need Jesus!
0laToxic said:
This. Is. Beautiful!!!
Nugwa, u bera come out of that shell and keep writing for us. Stop being stingy!
And Ekwe, I’m with Cece, chill small nah! /:)
Ekwe said:
@cece and toxic
ah! sorry o. i didnt realize i sounded harsh o. the word was just nagging me and i had to check it in the dictionary. i didnt find it so i thought to come back and tell him. abeg o. make una no dey paint me as bad guy. i did inspire this post afterall, abi i lie, Nugwa? *gloating*
cogitationsofme said:
Okay!you wrote this in 20 minutes? Wow! Your work is amazing.